2nd chapter is hilarious; you've got a great way with wordplay and play on words. Very, very interesting. I've a feeling I'm going to love this lots; very original!
Love the first chapter of this; for a vampire story it seems like it's going to be pretty funny if this is anything to go by. I LOVE VAMPIRE FICS, so just because of that, I'd like to add you as a friend, that is if you don't mind? You might want to check out my vampire fic, 'And If The Sun Comes Up'; it's a vampire story with a twist. I know what the end is and it's going to be fuckin' HUGE, I can tell ya.
Rayne is silly. He annoys me, yet he still does ooze said sex appeal, in a creepy way. As Kaitlynn says: "I'd tap it once. then twice if I like it," or something like that. Anywayyy! More, because I'm so confused. damn you and yourr cliffhangers.