The Darkest Dawn - Comments

Aw! Cute chapter! I like it when things are happy :) Although, I do feel that tragedy is necessary every so often...

this is good so far! i look forward to reading the rest of it!

Hello Zaruba, Yes there are two writers and we plan on writing the story based on the two man chanters perspectives. Audrina is the others and Mine is Nova’s (updating soon). Thank you very much for your comments and please keep commenting.

Fuck senseless? Kinky sex? Wow! You would have gotten 5 stars if you hadn't put that broken link in there.

My own opinion is that all things like clothing, surrounding, and characters in the clothing and environment should be drawn by your words. I think you should paint a image in the readers mind of where the character is and what they are wearing. Mental transfer that link with adjectives and colorful descriptions. You lost points by using a link, a broken one at that!

I like the story though. The uncensored dialogue keeps my attention and the worries of the main character are so real and relatable. It shows just how mature and talented a writer you both(?) are. I give this story 4 stars and I plan on subscribing so keep it up! It has talent.