High Offers - Comments

I think someone should invent an adjective for this. Beautiful is an understatement. Dear author, I'm in love with your story <3

There are no words.

That was beautiful. Maybe that's not the best word to describe it, but I can't find a better one.
Your writing is just incredible. This was so sad, but I absolutely loved it.

This was amazing. And so unexpected. For some reason I expected Russian Roulette or something.

The whole thing had this air of desperation and restlessness, which fits perfectly with how the two boys die so suddenly and in such confusion.

“I love you.” I defy my taut body and let my mind breathe.
If I knew those would be the last words he would ever hear, I wouldn’t have said them.

“I love you too.” The tears pour out of my open eyes.
If I knew those would be the last words I would ever hear, I would’ve still listened to them.

This was my favourite part. It is as if they were doomed to die in this way (which fits perfectly with the whole fortune cookie idea) and, no matter how long it took, they were going to die as soon as they told each other they loved each other.

I would've still listened to them. I found that the saddest part, because Frank died not really having comprehended that Gerard loved him.

We never should’ve lit it.
An unexpected offer holds much promise.
A fantastic ending...nothing more that I can say really. It as if they ruined all the promise the fortune had by lighting it.

I loved this, so orignal and well-written, well done for writing it :)

Woah. Deep, very very very deep. I loved it. It was sad, but still amazing. You got 1st place. xD

Congratulations.

I loved when Gerard said, "I really wanna have you." It made my heart melt just a tad. But that's okay. The amazingness of this story makes up for it.

One of the reasons why this got chosen for 1st was because of how well-written it was. You did a great job on that. The sentences flowed very well, and all the grammar was good.

Again, VERY amazing job. I've read some of your stories and loved all of them. Good job.

I really loved it!
Better then anything I can do.
That's just so sweet and so real and so amazing.
Good luck winning!

I loved it.
Beautiful. (:

that was completely amazing.

it had everything a 'kill the whole school' story needs with a cute lil love thing mixed right in. and even drugs! wow.

AND i cried! whats better then a story that makes you cry? nothing!!!

this was just, beautiful

Woahwow. That was sad, but it was also really beautiful...

Woah. That was amazing in such a sad, tragic way.

That was so sad but sweet at the same time.
It makes me not want to do drugs...not that I did want to...
Beautiful story