I Remember the Day You Were Born - Comments

Omygod, this story was awesome! I totally& completely fell head-over-heels for Cadence!! What a sick, sweet 'lil dude! I love how sly& manipulativ....&persuasive, he was! Great job!!

I loved this very much! I wish I hadn't found it just before I had to go to work though, now i'm going to spend the whole day at work wishing I could go home just so I can read the sequel of this. I can't wait to read the sequel though, if it's even half as good as this you'll have me hooked!

I thought the ending was fantastic, just because I completely expected they to end up happily ever after or whatever and it almost had a sort of dry humor to it, that it seems like they'll be in love and he just ends up stealing his debit card and leaving, I love that. I still think they'd make a sweet couple though just because Warner watched Cadence grow up and it sort of seems like Warner doesn't mind Cadence leaving like that because he loves him so much (though i'm not sure if that makes Cadence any less of a wanker for using said love against him), but I don't know, I suppose I shall see what the sequel brings!

loved this, going to read the sequel now:D

I really like this
a lot
and i'd write a longer comment but there's more for me to read :]

You just took the expression 'wrong' and brought it to a whole new level. :twitch:

That ending was so unbelievably unexpected. I really believed that they both had feelings for one another, but now I don't know if either of them ever had. It really seemed like Warner had feelings for him that made him feel bad and sick, and he also thought that Cadence had that kind of feelings for him, but I really don't know now.

I really love what you did, with making the younger boy take advantage of the older man, instead of taking the more common route and letting the older guy take advantage of the kid. Warner was obviously very disturbed by what he felt or thought he felt for Cadence, as he did care for his boyfriend, but couldn't give his all to satisfy him.

He was really troubled by it, but he thought he could handle having Cadence over, I guess, but when he didn't he went out to get smashed instead, giving Cadence the opportunity to use him.

You're a very cruel writer, because I thought they would finally get to be happy after they slept with each other, but of course, that was all a charade. I thought it would have had to mean something since they had known each other for such a long time, for all of Cadence's life, but I suppose that it was never real love or pride that they felt for one another. Not from Cadence, at least.

Great story, I really enjoyed it.
Thanks for entering the contest. :arms:

hahaha. I love how non-chalant Alphabet soup is about it. "Oh well. *files nails* Shit happens"

That made me laugh.

He had sex with him and then took his debit card.... well, shit happens. :file:

Good luck in the contest. :]

Lol. That was good.
I enjoyed it.

I think you should make it more then a one shot. :)

I completely agree! It would be an excellent story!

I love it, I really do.
But it makes me want more.

i was actually thinking that this could be a good ending for a story, but now you have me thinking!
I'll keep you posted on whether or not this expands n.n

Dr.Woozle:

He got totally played! He stole his debit card and left! Good thing those cards are traceable...

YES, he did.
But I think this could make for the good beginning of a great story... Even though it is in one shot format. I really liked it. ^_^

He got totally played! He stole his debit card and left! Good thing those cards are traceable...