Obsessions Of The Teenage Mind (The Media Is At Fault) - Comments

I really love this, and how that first part was written from the perspective of her alarm clock. xD
It instantly reminded me of Alice In Wonderland, but really... different.
The imagery in this is easy to grasp, and very very beautiful. I love it. <3

This is very interesting and I can't wait for more!

I love how she is addicted to the internet. And she's a Frerard fan! Haha(:

I also love the idea of the alarm clock being the narrator. That I have never heard of before.

And this line is simply beautiful Saxophones beaming through the speakers at her side, creating a hypnotic rhythm irresistible to the human mind.

Update soon!

I can't believe that I didn't read anything by you until now D:
This is really intriguing! Can't wait to see where it goes (:
I subs :]

I read this ages ago because the title intruiged me so much.
It's a brilliant idea, and your ability of personification astounds me.
The description you give the laptop, comparing it to a demon and how it wheezes, it's amazing, and makes it so easy to read and love.

This is so unique, keep it up, it's gorgeous!

^. I've tried, it's just coming along the way I planned.

I will on Wednesday. Make me!

UPDATE

Before you are Mibb-murdered

Love the uniqueness of this story, your writing style is great.
Really good (:

^ I have writer's block :(

I'm going to force myself, I swear, in the next week, and If I don't update, I'll delete it.

Sorry guys, I completely forgot for two months.

*Pokes.* Update. D: XD

You asked me to read your story last night, so I'm going to give it my honest opinion and point out anything I think should or shouldn't be there. If anything I say offends you I apologize ahead of time.

For the title, I like it but the part in parentheses can get you reported. I would put that in the short description of the story.

I would suggest making your own layout so that the graphic doesn't leak over the intended writing space.

And in your Status, roughly is spelled like so.

Harleen's last name should be capitilized. (Harleen Green) as well as Canada, seeing as it is a country.

I love the name Harleen. Reminds me of Harley Quinn.

the charcoal grey piece of machinery sitting petite on her desk this sentence doesn't make sense to me. Petite means small. the machine is sitting small on her desk?

The silent cry of a floorboard, I like that alot.

Ha! I love the fact that you describe her laptop as a demon. That's perfect. And the fact that you've made narrator the alarm clock. That's priceless, and truly unique.

This is really interseting.
I've never read anything like this, so it's a nice thing.
I like it. :D

Ugh, I have writers block. I'll definitely update in the next five days, sorry, I've had more exams.

I am in love with your story. And, no, there wasn't any grammatical error, as far as I could observe.
So, well done on your story.
You're one of the best writers I've come across here; I love the way you can write it. Especially such an original story.
I loved the way you ended the Introduction Chapter: I am Harleen's trusted adviser, her friend of two years. I am the alarm clock sitting on her bedside table. Hehe.
Anyway, please update when you get the time? I'm most definitely subscribing.

I will try to update in the next few days, due to exams I have not been able to this past fortnight, but as soon as I can, I will update.
Thanks for the comments and subscriptions, guys xD

Really cool.
So descriptive and interesting.
Update soon hey.

I love the way that you have personified the laptop, the phone and the alarm clock. And the way that the alarm clock tells the story, referring to the mascara brush as a paintbrush...it's really good, and I am subscribing. xD You're writing style is really good, some of the best that I've seen, your use of metaphors and descriptions are absolutley astounding "a sea witch enticing sailors". There's like ten sentances I want to steal (I wont) for my own!! This is some seriously good stuff you have here. I don't think I've ever fangirled over and Mibbian's story before...!!

This is rreally, really good.
Please update soon.

i have commented already!!!!!!! but again i like it

oh my god. this is effing amazing.
I just finished the introduction, and when it turns out the narrator is her alarm clock, I was like- That's the most clever thing I've ever heard of.

This is excellent! I can honestly say it's completely original. Keep up the good work!