Holding On - Comments

i think my favorite part was the whole just knowing bit, because that totally happens--or so i believe--when you find your person, your one, you just know it.

as for the ocean bit, to me it's overwhelming. the vastness it represents, the life it holds, it can take you away. it can take you to places you've never dreamed of, places you can escape to forget even who you are. it holds dangers and mysteries. it gives life and can take lives. it's also freedom, that fleeting moment of forgetting life, just you and the water as you surf, that moment of excitement as you snorkel and scooba dive and find something you've been looking for, that moment of comfort as the waves wash over your feet, burying them in the sand, connecting both earth and sea and you as one. not sure if that's what you were looking for, i tried. =]

Love it :) Cant wait for the update :)

This is gonna be sad, huh? *sigh*

I like the way it's written. Your style's very familiar, and for me, that's kind of a good thing. I like the way it has flashbacks, but it's hard for me to remember that she's a senior in the present. It's so much easier for me to relate to the freshmen. :shifty

Calling them the 'it' girls was kind of a turnoff for me, because it seemed so out of place. It was just a random comment, it seemed.

I'm interested in reading more

thanks for asking me to read this. i wasn't let down. at least you know of the few mishaps you've had here and there, but over all, i'm rather impressed with the portrayal of emotions.

i want to know of aaron's background, that'll help set the rest of the tone of your already morose tone as is. as for where his parents are, i'm not sure.

i do like the change from present to past back to present. it adds to the emotional turmoil of the story.

This is absolutely amazing, it's different but a good kind of different. The whole past then present thing is nice, it shows how things then were happy and carefree but the present is full of dread and wondering. It's cool that you asked me to read this, I really enjoyed it. Write more soon! :D

This is really, really good! :D

im really glad you asked me to read this. i really like it. --subscribes--

sorry about not getting the writing done for te contest, i havent been on here for a while because ive been really busy.

I really love how real it is.
The girl with the bubblegum lifestyle, and then it's all crashing down on her with her boyfriend in the hospital.

I love it! :) .

Annnd, I guess it all depends what kind of lifestyle his parents lead. Maybe they should just be out walking a dog. Or having sex in their bedroom, ignoring phone calls. Or maybe they both decided to leave eachother, at the exact same time. I don't know.

Okay, so you commented on my profile asking me to read this. And I don't regret reading it at all. (which is pretty good for me) Someone else commented above about having a few spelling errors and I agree. Also, you asked on the third chapter in the author's note, where should I make Aaron's parents be since they're not at the hospital. I think you should consider (just because I think you should have something to lighten the mood in the story) having them have gone to the wrong hospital and then this whole story about that. :tehe: I can never stay away from humor. But, anyways, I'm subscribing so keep it coming. :)

I love it.
It's really creative, and there's a good balance of dialouge and narration.
Keep it coming, I'll be sure to read more :)

Write more :)

thist story is so sad
i love it
cant wait for mroe

Oooh! This sounds so good! In the first chapter there a few spelling errors (you spelled Aaron as 'Erin' in the paragraph explaining what happened to him), but it sounds so good! This is totally my type of genre. Haha. Luv ya!
~Ash