Glasgow Smile - Comments

I actually quite enjoyed this.
It was very well-written, and I like the definition of the title as the description.
All around, I liked it, and I'd definitely read more of this type of thing from you.

hell, i enjoyed itt :]

Electric Goat:

I thought it was really good. I think that before he actually killed her, there should have been more of a glimpse into the fact that he had toyed with the idea. One minute he just dislikes her and is shy, and the next he's tearing her face up.

Yeah, I get what you mean. I'll probably edit it later on and add that in there. (;

I thought it was really good. I think that before he actually killed her, there should have been more of a glimpse into the fact that he had toyed with the idea. One minute he just dislikes her and is shy, and the next he's tearing her face up.

But other than that, it was very well written and incredibly entertaining.