Your Tears Don't Fall, They Crash Around Me - Comments

One thing I like about your story was that it was simple, short and sweet. Your plot was nice, although, it was pretty cliche.

Work on your grammar/punctuation/sentence structure a little more; there were a few minor errors here and there. Be a little more descriptive, and try not to repeat your words. Most importantly, you should try to put more emotion into it; I know you tried, but I didn't feel Elena's sadness.

Work harder, keep trying, and I'm sure you'll improve as an author. x]

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wow...
just wow...
that was so good...
I'm speechless...

Hey, guess what? You've won third place with this story!
^^
You are now linked on my profile and signature for one month... Hope you're story gets more reads that way!

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Thanks.
When it comes to writing a sad story,I put all my emotions in it,whether its anger,sadness or whatever.

I nearly cried reading this as well, this was amazing.
You did an excellent job and I really enjoyed this.