Not your best, but still amazing!
January 10th, 2010 at 07:11pm
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I loved this, but I can't deny that it bought a tear to my eye. You expressed the character's emotions so well and I truely felt my deepest sympathies towards this person.
I liked how you didn't reveal that the character's lover was dead straightaway. You left us wondering what on earth split these two people up and at first i assumed it was just some sort of break-up after an arguement. But the fact that this person's lover was stolen away from them by death proves that they will never smile again.
The short sentences at the end of the story were an effective way to wrap it up. They drew together all of the emotions portrayed in the piece and gave it a very powerful and beautiful ending.
Very good use of the prompt. Good luck and thank you so much for entering :]