Stolen - Comments

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*have to try somethin, soz*

Frank's a crazy little shit.
Liked it very much though (:

I really liked this.

I loved this!!

and I would love it more if you made it a short story, maybe three chapters even??
XD

BRAVO!

x.x.x.

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What the hell was that? XD

Sammy, seriously; I already know you're not exactly random, but this was surprising. You told me that Frank stole Gerard's coffee, but this wasn't a reasoning I was expecting: “I gave my coffee change to this old guy, then he ran away and now I have no money and I need coffee ‘cause...well, coffee.” That's not right; I mean, Frank's got some serious problem, because kids just don't do that. Unless he really wanted something from Gerard and just didn't know how to directly ask him. Frank confesses that he's been watching Gerard for some days, so I guess he could have just a little obsession with tasting Gerard, but seriously - he's just fucked up in his head.

And Gerard is just so oblivious about everything that happens with Frank. I like how he thinks there's a man in front of him, because he can't see the figure quite well due to the sunlight. I like how he is surprised that Frank's just a kid, a very extraordinary one actually, and how he just feels 'robbed and molested' at the end of the scene. Because, sure, no one expects some kid to come to them and bluntly tell them that he wants the coffee they're drinking. Pfft, that's not right.

But I liked it, and those final words made the story seem satisfying enough.
He seriously doesn’t understand what just happened, he feels robbed and molested yet he’s the one who could possibly be jailed for the experience. (...) At least he won’t have to pay for coffee tomorrow, he thinks.
Yeah, sure. Frank wanted his coffee, then shared the remains of it by kissing Gerard, and he feels violated from that. But he doesn't seem to regret, because otherwise he wouldn't see tomorrow's coffee as a good oppurtunity.

This was interesting, so good luck for the contest :cute:
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muy buien. never read a story like this, and its really cool. huhuh coffee.

Wow. I think I'm in love with this. It has the potential to be a really amazing
story if you decide to write more. I would certainly adore you for it. *hint hint*

Ha, Frank is totally adorable in this. He's just so innocent, but at the same
time he's not. I love that he acts like stealing coffee from a man who's over
twice his age and then kissing him is something that happens every day.

Really great job, one-shot or not. xoxo