October 6th, 2009 at 05:32am
this is really good. the early chapters did have a bit to much dialogue but you got a good balance by the end :)
itsreally good
I'm Not a Slave - Comments
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September 27th, 2009 at 07:47pm
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This is a great story and I agree with NeverShoutTana, if you add a weeny bit more detail it would be better but it did get better the further on in the story it went. Update soon please cos' this is really good.September 27th, 2009 at 06:51pm
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I liked the last chapter,oddly. Gosh i must be a perv. or something xD
lol jk jk
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Update pretty plz!September 24th, 2009 at 05:33am
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Hey awesome story!!!September 21st, 2009 at 01:32am
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ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh wonder wat gonna happe?? cant wait 4 moreSeptember 20th, 2009 at 04:18am
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the most recent chapt was my fav :]September 19th, 2009 at 11:11pm
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you should try to ass more detail than dialogue [sp?] because you can't seem to do both. You have to do both detail and dialogue and make the story more understandble as of now everything seems to be moving and happening to fast. Sorry if i sound like a bitch because this story is awesome and made me laugh :)
I like it huns, just give me more detail
hehehe read my stories please ;], i just wanna kind of show you what i mean but detail and dialogue :PSeptember 15th, 2009 at 04:46am
she's pregnant?
What a suprise!
well i kinda sorta saw that coming O>O
eep!!!??
why'd i say eep?
ughh that's me getting excited lolz