Alternativity - Comments

So, this is awesome and you are sooo going on my Favorite Authors list
right next to break.my.bones(:

This is amazing!
Few people could write anything remotely like this and pull it off.
It sent chills and thrills down my spine!
I loved it.
"I knew then that in every world there could ever be, my brother would be an insane son of a bitch"
My favorite line!

My mind is most definitely boggled! Love the way it's entirely unique & makes you think. That's so rare. Thank you!

UM. Wow. I am really just stunned. This was (and still is) so awesome.

There was a fire in his eye, something that had been there for years but you would always feel like you just discovered.

I love that line.

He spewed words that held no meaning and yet seemed to weigh the world, hardly above a whisper.

That is really awesome.

A sparkle that was unnatural in human eyes shone there.

It's almost like he isn't even human.

“Is that a yes or a no, Donnie?”

There was something in his voice that I had never heard before. It was sour and wanted to devour me whole. When I looked at him, I caught sight of the same hunger in his lunatic gaze. “Yes, David,” I said obediently.

That was so creepy, and it shows what kind of control David has.

“Welcome home, Donnie,” he whispered, that terrifying grin stretching his face.

That gave me cold chills, no lie.

Yeah. So I'm still shocked and after I finished I kind of just stared at the screen, wide-eyed, like, "Oh my."

Haha. Yeah. So I'm definitely checking out the sequel. And you definitely deserved an A for this in class. :)

that was really good, but it totally creeped me out.. wow, i cannot WAIT for how the Violet story is going to unfold! :)

Wow! This was amazing! The descriptions were so amazing and the characters were so good! I didn't read anything like this before and I loved it ^^ The ending shocked me. David is really a crazy guy!

Excuse me: I was wondering if you got graded on your short story, this is absolutely amazing. If you did get graded on this story - what did you get? If not I will give you a grade of A+.

I thought the story at first was nothing like I thought it was when I read the summary; I don't know what I was thinking but the end result left me shocked and quite terrified of his... unnatural behaviour - for lack of better word. It came together quite nicely at the end though; I think it says something about Donnie and the way he acts around his brother, David, who is slightly on the crazy side, and really I'm just at a loss for words.

All I was ready to read was something about an escapee from an asylum, kidnapping his brother and trying to prove to the world his new discovery was something real, but honestly it was nothing of that at first. I'm really just too enamored, at awe with this piece; your description was amazing. I fell in-step with the characters and that was a beautiful sensation.

I really hope that the sequel you have planned is as amazing and brillliant as this one, and hopefully I'll be able to read it soon. You truly deserved an A+ if this were graded.