AHHH! I didn't even realize I forgot to comment for this recent chapter. Forgive me? I don't know what happened lol. I was on this comment page here ... but I don't know ahaha. My mind is all spazzed out right now. I just got back from my Grandparent's, having been with them for the entire week (I was on Fall Break). And now I'm still trying to get in the groove (HA!), getting caught up with a shit-load of updates. -_- But anywho! To say something for this chapter: I've never read how Cynthia broke it off with Barry. I don't think even she mentioned it in her book(s). So this was a good thing to see. =) You handled this very nicely. I loved it when John stepped in to save Cyn, it was very cute. But I just can't help feel this sense of .. doom? I don't really know what it is myself. Particularly, I keep thinking of the time when John slapped her. Don't ask why, I just am. It makes me sad to think he did that. But yeah, other than that, I loved this new chapter. =) Keep this going. I like your new direction! And the banner as well! ^_^ She did a nice job with it.
You ceratinly are going in a very different direction than most fanfics, plus you have to write in all aspects of their relationship otherwise it won't work if you sugercoat it. But that's just me, and that sex scene was awesome! Gotta love John sex.
I love this story! Its like the only story I've ever read that even acknowledges her exisistance let alone have a love story between her and John. Kudos to you!
sorry again about being so late. i dont want to keep saying this so just know that life is pretty hectic right now but i will always evantually get around to reading this gorgeous thing :D i think that you're allowed to change things around a little bit in these stories. I mean, I didnt even know when she broke it off with Barry anyway, so this still worked for me :) I really love how sweet John is, it makes me smile like fucking crazy :) keep it up, love. ♥
Oh goodness you, there was absolutely nothing "horrid" about that. :D I thought that it was very cute and quite realistic, I might say lol ;) I'm terribly sorry about how late this comment is, I was so busy this weekend, I had a paper that I had to write and it honestly took up ALL of my time!!! But I'm gald you updated this because now that I can finally relax, I'm given something very pleasant to read. :D So sorry again about the lateness :(
Dude, any chapter full of John sex is fine by me! XD But in all honesty, this was hot. Veery erotic. I didn't know you could write something like that! -sigh- It's been too long since I've written a sex scene, and much more since it's involved John. =( But why am I rambling? This chapter was great!! I re-read it about three times. The ending made me remember how in her book, John, Cynthia mentions when she and John first got together. And she also put in about the missing her bus. I loved it when she wrote about how John asked her what she would be doing the next day, and the next, ect. ect. ect. And Cynthia repsonds, "Seeing you!". That part just got to me so much in the book!
no problem on the comment :D I really liked this chapter. Again, some grammar needed to be looked at, there was a lack of commas and semi-colons, but other than that, the chapter was very good. I love how obviously in love Cynthia is with him but she doesnt quite know it herself. :) It's very cute. I wonder what it would have been like if she ended up with Barry, that would just be the oddest thing lol. But keep going with this, each chapter, your writing is getting better so by the end, hopefully, it will be impeccable. :D
I agree with Pattie above me lol. You really did do your research! When I saw you had posted a new story, and that it was a fanfic, I was like o_o YEY! I'm so glad you're writing out John and Cynthia's story. No one ever does that. It's probably the saddest Beatle love story. I love Cynthia with all my heart and totally perfer her over Yoko. But we all know her relationship with John practically screamed "DOOM!". >.< It wasn't her fault, though, that the marriage didn't last and that's what people tend to forget. They all blame her because of getting pregnant, but it wasn't her fault. Again, like Pattie said, I really do hope you get Cyn's point across. She needs some spotlight, the poor girl. Continue doing your research and this'll turn out awesome. -subs-
:D LOVE CYNTHIAAAAA!!!!!! I really like that its her story, because, like you said, most people create another person to fall in love with one of them and sorta forget that there was another lady that loved them a whole hell of a lot. And I really like that you're choosing to do Cynthia's story because it really is the worst one. And people seem to forget that John handled it rather shabbily. Hopefully you'll get her point across and not his :D But please continue with this, it could be pretty enlightening. Oh yeah, and I can tell that you did your research, everything seems pretty much in order that way. :D:D:D:D