"Frank had tried touching Bob’s golden locks, Bob didn’t like that, and he used his awesome body builder moves on poor and innocent Frank."
Hahaha, that was fab, It made me laugh, too. You captured their personalities really well. Well done :D I'd have liked to hear a bit more about Hawaii though. :)
“You can’t even safely go in that swimming area, it’s five feet depth. You would drown.”
I love how you captured everyone's personality perfectly, especially Mikey's. My only problem however was that the end of the story seemed rather rushed and I would have liked to hear a few more details about their actual trip in Hawaii. Thank you for entering the contest! :)
September 27th, 2009 at 05:23pm
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It was very entertaining and well written.
You're a good writer :D