Fields Of Gold - Comments

That was stunning, really.
It reminded me of the Notebook, but it was so original at the same time.

I don't know, man. You are a very talented writer.
:]

You know, I know I commented on this already, but that was a long time ago and I'm reading it a second time. This story is just so pure and beautiful, the words just flow, it's great. The emotional feeling you put into it was so strong and vivid, and I can't imagine a stronger love between the two.

I loved the plotline, it was original and beautiful. I enjoyed reading this muchly!

As a Story Editor, it's an instinct of mine to tell you that you should leave a space between dialogue. :mrgreen:

This was a really good story.

Starless Eyes.:

This was so touching. I love the description, it's so clear and left a vivid picture in my mind.
It was written really well, I enjoyed it!
It's really original and I love original stories.

But I don't understand what had happened at the end. Did she die in the field?

Apart from that misunderstanding of mine, I thought the story was amazing, and so was the plotline. Reading that was really not a waste of my time!
=]

aww thank you.

In my head, she died in the field, but I kinda left it up to the reader to decide. I also left it to the reader to decide what happened to James. I just thought it would make it more interesting...

This was so touching. I love the description, it's so clear and left a vivid picture in my mind.
It was written really well, I enjoyed it!
It's really original and I love original stories.

But I don't understand what had happened at the end. Did she die in the field?

Apart from that misunderstanding of mine, I thought the story was amazing, and so was the plotline. Reading that was really not a waste of my time!
=]

For this to be your first (original)fiction, I thought you pulled it through.

I really liked the beginning of the story with the pebble and them laying down looking up into the sky. It left a lovely picture in mind. I also, liked how you described James character and overall descriptions. When you started the dialogue that's when It got all fuzzy looking. When a person talks a new line should be created.

The romance to me, seemed real and I felt the emotion going through the words.

Again there was the beautiful silence. The sun and the golden warmth had disappeared behind the trees and we had been left in the dark.

^I loved that line. The scene from the notebook was my favor tie part as well. Well done on that part. The only thing I didn't like was the story title, it didn't make sense to me. When in fact I did read the story summary. Maybe, I need to hear the song...

That was amazing, really. The storyline's totally original to anything else on here, i was completely absorbed in it :)
fantastic story x

Oh wow. I loved your story.
It made me cry. It was sweet and sad. But I guess that was the rection you were wanting.
Your story really touched me and I especially loved the ending. In alot of stories the ending spoils it, But yours didnt; your ending made the whole story.
Amazing.
♥