Cotton Candy - Comments

Aww, I really liked this. <3
The ending had a sad tone to it, but I guess that's how it had to be.
Great job!

I imagined this real smooth and clearly, which made me wanted to cry. Pshhh. Sweet but sad at the same time, I don't know how you managed to put them together because it's beautiful. I want some cotton candy right now :3

That was so sweet and the ending seriously made me cry.

I just had to comment on this one... it's simply sweet, yet somehow scary, because I could see a bit of my life in what you wrote.

I love the soft images that you use without delving too much in with the descriptions of how everything looked like; otherwise, it would have taken that beautiful effect you give to most of your stories; an effect that I've learned to compare with polaroid photographs that are somehow blury, but you can still appreciate the small details instead of delving in with the big picture of things.

To be honest, the story actually made me cry at the end; the whole thing about one of them making his own life without the one who used to be his loved one brings out that emotional wreck that I am and really made me put myself in that position, being the one who leaves.

It was a gorgeous story and I really can't criticize anything about it.

I love every single one of your one-shots. They really inspire me. Except I kind of suck at writing so it doesn't matter anyway.
But this was beautifully written. I love the way the whole thing ties together and isn't just totally pointless if you get what I mean.

xx

I think this is beautiful. The way even though it's been a while since the relationship ended, he still holds onto that one memory. And I think most people can relate to that clinging onto something that you can't get back in one way or another. And the way he's clinging onto a specific thing, the candyfloss, puts a significance to it. Anyone can love a memory of a perfect time but I bet he wouldn't ever be able to eat candyfloss without remembering that time, or drive past a fairground without thinking of him. And I love how your writing always flows in a very real voice. The line 'You were grinning like the idiot you always were and always have been' makes their relationship feel very genuine because it just sounds like something a real person would say. The line 'I’m still here, stuck in this city we said we’d always run away from together' shows his sadness that the promises were broken but nostaligia that they did have those times together, absolutely perfectly.

It was brilliant to read. I loved it. Thank you for writing it, Dru.

Before I clicked on this from the stories overview page, Dru, I had no idea this was yours until I clicked to this page to comment. I don't usually read slash, but since there was hardly any mention of it, I really enjoyed the sweetness of Ryan and Brendon's relationship. Or what we got to see of it anyway.

The descriptions were absolutely amazing.
The way it was narrated was perfect. It was very bittersweet, what with the happy memory of the carnival and the cotton candy, but also mixed in with the sadness of how he felt after they stopped seeing each other.

I honestly can't pick out any faults here, it was such a good read. And the last line was so touching, about him sometimes buying a bag of cotton candy to remember that day at the carnival.

It was brilliant, I loved it. ^.^

New drabble.
First in awhile.
No names, but it's Ryden.
PG-13.
Happy reading!

xoxox
-Dru