Futuresex / Red Dragon / The Judgement - Comments

Hey! xD
I'm super lag okay, now then come read and review.

Now, for the con. crit.
Maybe make the plot move along slightly faster? Not rush everything, I realise some parts are key to the story's development, but too slow ain't super good.
Maybe include more descriptions?
But the way speech flowed between your characters was flawless, and your writings have a sort of abstract, not straightforward and detached feel that make everything click together.
Ending the poet-talk, Let's just say I'm interested and suscribing.
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mm...great chap again gurl! maan you're FAST at updating!! >=X

"could i be an evil person who's out to kill you?" "hmm. i could be." xDD jokes aside, another great chap! anyways...do update soon! but don't forget to study for EOYs! =))

<3 RS-poo =D

nehehe...one 'critic' a day will do well for me =X...love your little jokes here and there in your story!

HEY! nice chap as usual, but since you always give me constructive critism, i'll give you some too xD! and we all know that these kinds of comments are waay more useful than the more common, more liked fan-praise ^^
"effeminate" not "effiminate"
"acquaintance" not "acquiantance"
and maybe it's just me, but some parts, your words are o__o...for eg:
wads: "dysphoria", "femme fatales", and "hellohole"?

Well, that's my umm 'critic'? =D UWAAAAH! I'M BETTER BEING MY HAPPY-GO-LUCKY SELF AND GIVING FAN-PRAISE!!!! xDD nvm me...=D

heehee...your endings are always sorta funny! love it!!! but as usual i say you should tone down on your "cheem-ness" ^^ btw, forgot to add: 1st comment! but now i guess, SECOND COMMENT as well!! =D

GREAT START!!! i love the ending xD "this drama just turned into a sitcom" JY!!