This was quite good! I think it might have ended a bit too abruptly, but I understand you were just writing a one shot for a contest.
It was written very well, again with only a few lapses in grammar. It kept me interested, and it played out well.
I really wish I could make these reviews longer for you, since they're part of your prize for second place. But, I simply could not find anything to correct or suggest on.
It was written very well, again with only a few lapses in grammar. It kept me interested, and it played out well.
I really wish I could make these reviews longer for you, since they're part of your prize for second place. But, I simply could not find anything to correct or suggest on.