Just Like Tommy Lee - Comments

awww this is so cute just like Tommy Lee >w<

Aw, this was awesome! So cute! I loved it. :) Great job.

hahaha! wondeful, absolutly wonderful!
You know what I realised? You are a fantastic writter! This is only the third piece of your I have red, but I've loved them all.
The whole time I was reading this, it was bringing back memories of my child hood listneing to the song 'All Torn Down' by The Living End.
I remember how my sister use to get up on the lounge and jump down singing the lyrics to the chorus - as if she was 'all torn down'.
:)

Thank you! XD

this was amazing...
excellent job =D

Ohwow, this is amazing and adorable!
I absolutely love how you made the narrator young, and pointed out that she was
different from her classmates because she liked different music. When I had the idea
for this contest I assumed almost everyone would write it as an older person looking
back on the memories of hearing that song, but the way you wrote it was just so
original and amazing. (:

In her mind, if she didn't move, he couldn't see her. Like an ostrich.
That's my favourite line, mostly because it's funny in a way, and the way you punctuated
it just made it better and that much more humourous.

"I didn't mean to wake you," She said sheepishly. Her mother laughed, holding up a video camera.

"You didn't," She replied to her daughter. "And by the way, you were just like Tommy Lee."
The ending just tied everything together perfectly. I love the feeling you get when you finish
reading that last line, it's one of closure and yet you're still wondering and I love it.
I would consider taking out 'and by the way,' in the sentence you can hear the mother's love
for her daughter very well, but without that one part, it would get through a lot clearer (if that was
what you were intending though, of course, either way, it is a perfect ending.)

There are a few spelling mistakes almost near the end, nothing huge, just a few jumbled words,
they didn't take from the story at all for me, but to some they may.

All in all, this was an absolutely wonderful first entry.