Wild as an Elephant's Child - Comments

Very nice! The story was amazing, and it went along perfectly with the song. In the beginning, she meets a boy, and the tempo of the song is slow, then as it speeds up, so does their friendship, and the finally, he tells her he’s leaving, slowing down the tempo to bring in the sadness, and then it ends on a beautiful note of her realizing what was right, and that was going with him. Wonderful job, I really enjoyed this story!

I'm a judge for the Pre-write contest and I absolutely loved this. Your descriptions were very visual and lovely. The dialogue felt natural, the characterization was great, your spelling and grammar was right on. Oh the memories of the first generation Ford Festiva hatchbacks. Thanks for that! Great work!

i have a feeling i'm going to really like this one.
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