Hush Now, You Know Nothing Lasts - Comments

This is a wonderful story, just the switching of tenses and spelling is off. You seem to change from past to present tenses. If you fix those two problems then the story is perfect, right now its merely brilliant.
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I have to say,
You did better than I expected on that.

i almost cried... that was...no words...for it..

wow that was beautiful

No, it was good. Very sad, but good.
Can't wait for more!

Excellent job! I'm glad this story has been updated. And, I can't wait for more :D

lovely sweet touching i do not know what words could possibly be right to describe this more and there is one meaningless mistake you wrote hid bed instead of his just to let you know

I just cried.
I think your strength in writing is connection with the characters.
I think you could actually go somewhere with your writing ability.
Oh, I'm starting a story myself.
2, actually.
I need a lot of help,
Because I'm not that great of a writer,
And I really don't know where I want to go with it.

Gr! Vince is disgusting, he makes me a very angry person. How could he do that to her? But then again, if he didn't, there wouldn't be a story.

Still on a brighter note, I would like to compliment you on your writing style. I love, love how descriptive you are. Like when Vince was standing behind her and speaking to her, it was elaborated nicely. Great job!

But, I'm not giving up on Dylan yet. What's wrong with him? I hope this isn't the last we'll hear of him.

Update soon :D

Well, I just found this story, and I love it! Amazing job :D I must, MUST know what's going to happen next. Especially with Dylan, he's a very interesting person. I can't wait to read more!

*Subscribes :]*

pregnant silence i liked that good personal style and choice of writing i feel like an addict by the second last line i was thinking about when the next would be out this story is brilliant well done

Kayla,
I'm not picking on you.
If you send me the story before you post it,
I'll GRAMMATICALLY fix it.
I won't even read [like comprehend] it if you don't want me to.
Well,
I'm strongly anticipating the next chapter to both stories.
So,
Hurry up!
I love you.;3
-Miss Dork

wonderful chapter

here is a cupcake for you brilliant writing :D

here is a cupcake for you brilliant writing :D

OH MY GOSH i love this story

Sooooo beatuitful! I love the descriptivness and the picture you paint with your words!

*beautiful, Descriptiveness.

yes! please update soon :)

This is really awesome. I can't wait to read more!

WOW :D