Albus Dumbledore and the Bertie Botts Every Flavor Beans - Comments

Contest Judging
Layout
The layout...is not attractive. The bulky neon green font. Now, I know that if you read the rules you would know that I said no layouts like this, but because I'm in a good mood, I'll judge it anyway. Next time however, I won't even give this a second thought.

Title
I love that the title is like the Harry Potter books. Harry Potter and the blah blah blah. It works well with Albus. And I adore that it's about Bertie Botts every-flavored beans. That's just epic.

Story
I really don't get it. I mean...I don't see the point of it. You're describing how magnificent Albus is and getting into so much detail about himself and the students of Hogwarts then you sort of just break off and go to the beans. It didn't sit well for me, it didn't go anywhere and just kind of seemed like part of a story that was never completed and just kind of thrown together.

Oh wow, you're so good at descriptions! (:
well done. ♥

MIND BLOWN.
It hit me somewhere on the inside. Where I just don't know.
Nice job! good luck with the contests. :)

I think you nailed Dumbledore perfectly. :]
This was short, but it was well written and overall just made me smile.

Oh my gosh! This is absolutely epic! x]

I love the title. Ace job with it.

I love your description, it's flawless. It's a perfect job with Dumbledore.

For some reason, I imagined Dumbledore like in a total white space. I could picture him looking down and seeing Hogwarts the students, and all it's glory. I could picture him digging in the box for a bean and carelessly pulling one out and plopping it in his mouth. Then BAM! His face would twist into one of grimace and disgust. x] I also pictured this as one of his last moments, like a final chapter in his life. I have no clue why, I just do.

Anyway, I absolutely loved this. It was such a short and brilliant story. Great job!

Lovelovelovelovelove!

This was awesome[:
I love Harry Potter so I thought it was great.

I liked it a lot. It was short but descriptive and got the point across. I love the way you ended it too, it was perfect. (:

That was a rather fun read.
I was thinking, a harry potter drabble?
But it was actually pretty good.
I enjoyed reading it.

Good luck:]

I also entered this contest, and I remember reading this entry

It love it - your description is neat and concise, so you tell the reader so much in just 100 words. You capture Dumbledore's character so well.

It's really well written - well done!

Hiya, just wanna let you know that I'm one of them judges from TheDoctor's Pre-write Contest, drabble section!!
I do like this, really much. Even though it was short, but to the point, it still made me laugh. So, yeah, really do like this!! Keep it up!! XLD>

Hello, I'm one of the drabble judges from TheDoctor's contest! I just read your drabble and I thought it was pretty good. You took something from the books and used it well in a different situation. I didn't see any mistakes, either. It was short, to the point, and got the idea across. It was a little goofy yet very "Dumbledor-ish". Haha! Great job, keep up the good work! :D

I love this, it was perfect, very good =]

That was pretty much amazing.
Very well written, and you captured the scene so nicely.
(:

That was absolutely brillliant! I loved it!

I actually smiled at the end, and I don't usually do that.

Perfectly captured Dumbledore's essence. It was beautiful.

<3

And that is why I love Dumbledore.
Well written.
(By the way, it's fine if it's one word too many)

This was great! Even though it was so short, I felt as if it said so much :)