Let me tell you what I think of this story so far, I think it's absolutely amazing & I'm completely in love with the story line! =] Your writing is great and it causes to really get into the story, which I love.
You're right about fan fictions getting more feedback, but I really enjoy reading original fictions just as much. & I honestly think this story should get more popular because it's awesome.
I know what you mean, about the fan fictions getting more feed back then original fiction. I happen to like original fiction a lot though, especially this one. It's really well written, and I like the story line. I can't wait for more. :)
I like how she's rationalizing with herself about her brother, when she went through what she wanted, because it was realistic, and made sense, and it doesn't sound like you're forcing the story along.
This is very interesting, and I can't wait for the next update, to see where you take this.