First off, I want to say that you have almost no spelling mistakes, but quite a few grammar mistakes. i.e. It was a beautiful morning, Sora was taking his usual stroll through the park. Suddenly, everyone started running the opposite way he was walking.
I also think that it's lacking some more intricate words. Another way you could improve is by showing the reader everything that's happening, not telling them. You say what happens rather than describe it. But you have potential.
It was a beautiful morning, Sora was taking his usual stroll through the park. Suddenly, everyone started running the opposite way he was walking.
I also think that it's lacking some more intricate words. Another way you could improve is by showing the reader everything that's happening, not telling them. You say what happens rather than describe it. But you have potential.