October 25th, 2009 at 08:05am
Wow.
Very lovely story here. I thought it was amazing the way you were able to combine three contests into one story, obviously you are a brilliant writer.
You're spelling and grammar is perfect.
I really enjoyed this story because it was a simple thing as mistaking a person's true personality and not believing what others say about him. I think most people have done that at one point in their lives, if not numerous times.
It had a classic happy ending that I normally wouldn't like but this one left a smile on my lips. Beautiful story here and good luck in your other competitions.
I know the feeling when your with someone who just isn't right and you know exactly who is. : /
I loved your repeated reference's to be only 5 year olds, I thought that was very clever. And what a cute ending, Jase sounds like the perfect guy xD
No spelling or grammatical errors as far as I could see. And nice work with including both our contests ^ nicely done.
Good work.
Gen
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