Poisonous Kisses From Your Mouth - Comments

i think it would help a lot if you actually told the story as it was happening. all your chapters lately have been long recaps with no true emotion

UPDATE

first of all im sorry i havent commentedd in a while. i miss this story, i think its so cute and creative andd i think you have a wonderful talent and you dont know it yet...
to answer the questions i think its better, in any case with writnig, when you think out the chapter and know what your doing wth it. if you need help with inspiration, try the forums to this site and go to writing tips. its where people here talk about writing and it always inspires me to continue on :)

that was so cute :) hell i think thats how my friends see me and my boyfriend cuz we kinda make out alot lol but hey if we like it then who cares were happy

every chapter should have some thought into it, the random cute moments should be subtle so its sweet, not common. if that helps

oh my she called matthew her boyfriend yaay lol oh and jakes there wahoo!haha

OMG THAT WAS SO GOOD! the suspention was intense. i swore she was going to get raped but thank god there was some people around! please update soon! ill be waiting and im lonley without your stories ;)

It's really good, as always. If you want some critisism? I think you skip over the characters feelings too fast. Matthew just said he loved her and she walked off like it didnt happen. or maybe add some actions to make them more realistic. instead of talking talking talking, add in like i dont know, thm doing people things. like fidgeting looking at things, eating. doing things between the talk

you can ignore all that if youd like :)

yay!!!!matthews back!!!woot woot oh and thank you for noticing my insanity lol.:)))

yay! but i dont understand it! D:> write more so i can!

its almost been a full month.....

update soon? ive been waiting.....

Darn i wish it was longer D:< hurry and write the next!!!!

YAY!Matthews back!!!xD

Yay its back!!!!!!!! 8D

Really sucks that my sister and i have to wait months for this one :'( please update!!!!!!!!

still waiting for this update :'(

i think matthew should come back because he was a majour character and you blew him off and its turning to a diffrent story. :( i miss him already. what happened to this being a vampire story, its turned to a mcr fan fiction :( thats sad.....

please update?

she should stay with Matthew but anya should move out >> we dont like anya either