Sideshow Girl - Comments

Cute story, there's just a few errors fire eaters NEVER call torches skewers, secondly Asbestos is the talkative one.
Lastly I like the story but I do actually own the Names Bik Zippo and Asbestos Ronsonol and they are trademarked so...
All in all though I approve. Be well the very real Bik Zippo.

Update soon, woman! :D

MY BROTHER'S IN MANKATO TODAY VISITING MY COUSIN!

. . . Pointless little tidbit for you.

Anyway, very funny chapter.

loooved it. :)

Another great update! Can't wait to see more!

Boiled in oil? (gah, that rhymed. XD)
That is disgusting.

Anyways, loved the update. :)

Haha Nice. I wonder how this new guy's gonna go.

Great chapter.

Seriously scary. I would never do that! Never!

Great chapter, though.

That was scary. >_<

I like this. :D

Already missing the Renaissance, and this is only one chapter away from it! Although, Fight Club is my all time favourite movie/book. XP

Great chapter, my friend! Can't wait for more.

Sorry for the delay in reviewing. NaNo is killing my ability to do anything other than sit on the forum thread for NaNoWriMo and write. XP

Anyway, great chapter! Again, it's making me miss the Renaissance soooo much!

Every time you update, I get all these nice memories from my childhood. XP Great chapter!

Baha! Puke and Snot! That made me happy, even if they weren't physically in it!

Again, very good story! Perfect for the Minnesotan in us all! Wait. . . XP

Love Sheen

Bah! The Renaissance! I didn't go this year. :( I almost went, but I had something else going on the days people I knew were going. . .

Anyway, the storyline seems incredibly interesting. I don't know if it's just because I jump on any chance to read about Minnesota or not though. XP What can I say, I'm a nerd for my own community.

There are, however a few lapses in grammar/spelling. Mostly misspelled words. And: Shakopee (read SHOCK-uh-pee) No matter how confusing our town names may be to some people, I still wouldn't put them in the actual story. Just because it breaks away from the storyline and breaks the flow. I would put it in the A/N.

Also, I would add a bit more description in the dialogue parts of the story. It seems a little thin. And, instead of actually putting ~Later~, I would just put a page break in there, then add more detail to show that it was later. As before, it helps with the flow of the story.

GASP! I just thought of something! ARE PUKE AND SNOT GOING TO BE IN YOUR STORY!?

=D Ah, the childhood memories!

Anyway, over all, this is very good. And, I love all of the memories it brings back! I haven't been to the Renaissance since about seventh grade! Can't wait to read more.