Oh my! I love this. Seriously. Your writing style is awesome. And this chapter leaves me very curious. I definately want to know more about Marie [Victoria] and her life. I can't wait to see where this goes. I can't believe it doesn't have any more comments. Such a good start! :)
hope you keep going. [= youre a really good writer. i like your style, like the whole "a person like me" paragraph. repetition to get a point across. i Love that.