Bite - Comments

I have to second what's already been said. It's unusual to have any sort of gore in these stories other than a quick something. I liked the simplicity of it mostly, the shortness - which is rare. Good job.

This I absolutely brilliant, dear. You have some talent.

I thought the first sentence was an interesting hook. :) I love vampire fiction, and although this was short, it was satisfying. I don't mind the ending, and I feel that it is complete - the death of another victim, her vital organs halting to a stop. I also only expected one victim to be written about, so it was enjoyable to see two people (and of different genders), being attacked.

The only part I'm confused about is this sentence in the first paragraph: I was, below me though my need for these cattle might be. I thought it was connected to the previous sentence, but whenever I try to read it through, it doesn't seem to flow. Perhaps I'm reading it wrong?

Overall, a nice read. I like your short little stories. :)