January 15th, 2011 at 04:55am
Finally! A update, I though I was gonna have to hunt you down.
Please update sooner.
And I don't want Bill and Lyric to be torn apart so soon.
The only thing I don't like about this sentence is that I probably wouldn't be kicking and struggling for an hour xD Maybe like twenty seconds or something but an hour is pretty damn long. It's allll about perspective. But otherwise this was a cute couple sentences x3 The idea of Bill carrying me like that is like...defispgrsgjsfglsengps. So sweet x3 I imagine if he ever does that to be a sadist, I'd just lean my face into his neck and smile because it would be so adorable x3
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- He then, picked Savannah’s small frame up in his arms and carried her bridal style. Savannah kicked and struggled, but gave up after an hour. She knew that Bill wouldn’t give up and put her down.
Nein, Bill, stay and sleep with me ;-; But yeah, the back rooms of RVs are always epic. I just love RVs in general. We had this one at a play in August and during intermission we stayed in it and talked and shizz. It seriously was almost nicer than a tour bus, if you can believe that. I just like the idea of a moving house xD Except for when you're in the bathroom, then you hit a pothole and you go flying off the toilet xDDD
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- Savannah came into the back bedroom and collapsed on the bed. Bill watched her as she curled up and fell asleep. He covered her up with a blanked and lifted her head and put a pillow underneath. Then, he went to the couch with his own blanket and went to sleep.
That was just a sweet sentence. I love how you put that, for some reason. It was such a simple sentence but it made something happen inside of me, it really stressed somehow how important that music is to the twins. I don't even know why, but it did.
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- Instead, she was trying to figure out a way to surprise her son with the digital studio that her husband had bought for him. He wanted for Bill to use his voice with Tom's guitar to make music.
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- Savi:
- “I don’t know. Nor do I care. My mom hates me, and I am glad to be out of that damn house.” She said.
Nein, I canNOT date a boy who drinks orange juice.
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- Bill walked to the refrigerator and grabbed the orange juice.
Face of an angel? Awww, ich bin eine Engel? x3
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- a girl, a little younger than him. She had short, dirty brown hair, and her clothes were torn. She looked up at him to reveal a face of an angel.
Aw, I'm such a jerk to him xD
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- “Savannah . Savi, for short.” She replied, not taking Bill’s hand.
How did you know I've been kicked out of my house more than twice ._.
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- Savi nodded. “Yeah. I just got thrown out of my house.”
*is smiling pretty big right now*
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- Bill ran back to the park to find Savannah waiting for him where he had left her. He smiled at her as they walked off into the woods together.
I like the ending of that. It's the perfect song for this chapter. Being, like, free and shit. *fail comment* It's good imagery, anyway x3
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- Bill had never felt so…alive. He was free to be his own person. No rules. No parents. No Tom. Bill was finally as he called it :Frei Im freien fall.
Free in a free fall.
'Curtsey' should be 'courtesy' :]
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- Tom didn't have the common curtsey to use a pair of head phones.
Bill's so messy xD
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- His walls were littered with various band posters and old photos of he and his brother, taken during a time of pure bliss. His floor was covered with dirty clothes and school books that he didn't care about.
Should be 'dresser' :]
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- Bill walked to his dress
Aw ;-; Poor Bill. I understand how he feels because the same thing happens with my cheerleader sister, and guess what writing, singing scene girl gets ignored? -.-; Yup, me.
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- No one was going to notice him while Tom was practicing that damn instrument. His own mother ignored him! Bill hated it, but he was slowly getting used to it.
Update soon please