Okay, first off, let me say this: I'd love to just take a peek in your mind. It's has to be such a fascinating place to be.
I wish I had your writing style and your vocabulary. I wish I was capable of erected chills over someone's body with simply a few lines. You're brilliant. The words of this story created a mist and it blocked out everything else from my mind's eye. I was listening to music when I began reading. I was unable to hear it once your words enveloped me.
Wow.
I absolutely adore the effect your stories have on me. The concept for this is wonderful. When did you think of it? It's amazing. The way you executed the idea is perfect. You really did a great job. You nailed it.
I didn't expect that ending at all. It was beautiful though. I gasped when I read the ending line. You have a superb way of beginning and ending. Two very important elements of writing! The first couple of lines entrap me in the story and the last line always leaves me wanting more.
God, where did you get your talent? I want some.
The title, the picture, the short description... everything couldn't be more right to draw someone in. The descriptions you used in the story gave sort of an eerie atmosphere, but you balanced it out when you brought the Molly and her father together; it added a comforting touch, a sigh of relief.
I love how you made the time she was waiting for the time that he passed away. That was incredible. The way she was pacing. The way you gave no clear evidence that she was deceased. But the subtle details... the church bells. The cathedral. The fact that ghosts are hinted at in the short description and the picture. You built it up for the perfect climax and did a fantastic job! I enjoyed every second of it.
Okay, first off, let me say this: I'd love to just take a peek in your mind. It's has to be such a fascinating place to be.
I wish I had your writing style and your vocabulary. I wish I was capable of erected chills over someone's body with simply a few lines. You're brilliant. The words of this story created a mist and it blocked out everything else from my mind's eye. I was listening to music when I began reading. I was unable to hear it once your words enveloped me.
Wow.
I absolutely adore the effect your stories have on me. The concept for this is wonderful. When did you think of it? It's amazing. The way you executed the idea is perfect. You really did a great job. You nailed it.
I didn't expect that ending at all. It was beautiful though. I gasped when I read the ending line. You have a superb way of beginning and ending. Two very important elements of writing! The first couple of lines entrap me in the story and the last line always leaves me wanting more.
God, where did you get your talent? I want some.
The title, the picture, the short description... everything couldn't be more right to draw someone in. The descriptions you used in the story gave sort of an eerie atmosphere, but you balanced it out when you brought the Molly and her father together; it added a comforting touch, a sigh of relief.
I love how you made the time she was waiting for the time that he passed away. That was incredible. The way she was pacing. The way you gave no clear evidence that she was deceased. But the subtle details... the church bells. The cathedral. The fact that ghosts are hinted at in the short description and the picture. You built it up for the perfect climax and did a fantastic job! I enjoyed every second of it.
Bravo!