This was really good! I loved how the whole things sounds like it's a fairytale even though it's more of a night-mare...like it's bittersweet. It's very well written. :) I think you should continue writing.
Oooohhh I really like it! Is the story done already? :O I think you should start another. Goodnessss you are good ^^ at writing. You should tell me if you are going to start another, i'll definitley read it. I'm suprised no one has commented. :P Have you ever written a story with someone b4? Tell me if ur interested! hehe
short and sweet comment, just like your story <3