Behind The Mask - Comments

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lve it sooo much (: its getting pretty intense, cant wait for more!
thanx for the shout-out!

Whoa! She remembers! But I feel terrible about the fire. It destroyed everything she knew. Update soon!

love itttt (:

LUVVV it (:
update soooooon

I like this, it's pretty good.

There's a link on my page to a place called project fiction (it's under The Resistance though) and it's got some betas that will give you some really in depth reviews and will help you with your revision.

So, I've only read the first five chapters, but I like the plot.
There are a lot of ways this could go now, story wise. It's interesting.

Grammar/spelling wise, it needs a little work.
Not a lot, you're doing a pretty awesome job. I suggest getting a beta though, someone to look over the chapters after you do, catching errors or other things you might not have seen. [:

As I said, great story - beginning. (As I've only read to chapter 4 right now)
I like the shorter sentences you use compared to the really long ones that many others have.

I think you have a good idea going here. It's an interesting plot from what I've read (I'm going to go back and read the rest later I don't have enough time right now) and it's unique. I have two suggestions to make though. Spacing out the paragraphs would make it easier for the reader to read, and your grammar needs some work. Before you post a chapter you might want to read it over or run it through spell check.

Other than that great job =)

I love the story, plot line, and the characters. It's a very nice story, keep writing ^^

I like Faith. :)

I have read the first four chapters and honestly I like the plot, I like the story line. But some suggestions would be the spacing, you need to space stuff out. And you need to work on capitilization, along with proper tense. Just make sure to read over it when you are finished writing a chapter to catch these simple mistakes.

I haven't read the whole thing yet, but I liked what I've read so far (:

I think you're beginning is quite good. Its not my type of story, its good.

I like the first paragraph, a lot. Of the very first chapter. Its a great beginning, but I think you could have kept going with that philsophical tone, but you kind of stopped, as did the flow.

Just some constructive critisism, keep writing, and I'll keep reading.

sorry i havnt been commenting :( but i still love the storyyyy! update soon!

HA! That should show those idiot goons trying to steal Sassy. :)

Well plans are good. Sometimes planning gets you somewhere you wanna be; sometimes it doesn't. Hmm...

And I do agree with Dimli. The story is good but asking a friend or so to help you proofread could really work, whether Spell Check works or not :/ (Spell check is...odd sometimes) And the upside: it can make your story tons better! XDDD

Sooooo super sorry that i havnt been commenting! i just havnt had time to read anything lately! :) but i LOVE IT....its gettin pretty intense!

I did one better: I read all 40 today.
You should make the next one extreemly long. Like it takes you 20 minutes to read long. Like you wish it would just stop long. Like you mom yells at you because you've been on the computer all day long. Cause I have nothing to do so I mind as well read an awesome story.

Adsulotly love it. I havent bean reading latly so I read exactly 22 chapters today. I like how it got a little funny.