The Secret of Happiness Is Freedom - Comments

I really like this story! I like the way that it isn't vague. I find this story quite original and that's kid of hard to find now. I usually don’t read fan fics about music I’m not into, but I really like this one personally. I love your writing and it would be really nice if you could update soon!

i actually really, really like this! Great level of description, not too much but not too little! :) This story has some real potential to be great but maybe you should pay a little more attention to your editing. xx update soon!

This is a good story I can definitely see this story going well.

I think this could be a really great story. I absolutely love the level of description you put into this, it's really helpful with imagery and such like. There are a few spelling and grammar mistakes but nothing too off putting. I have to be honest and say that I don't know an awful lot about HIM, but from what I do know about them, I think you portray the characters very well. :) xx

I think this story definitely has some potential, but perhaps sometimes you go a bit fast paced with the narration. Try to take some more time to put details and work on spelling/grammar. It's always good to reread a few times and make sure everything is spelled correctly and you used proper punctuation. :) I don't know much about HIM or anyone in it, but I do like how you incorporated ballet and the fact that her mother was forcing her to do it, causing her to like it far less than she used to. Again, your story has potential, just take a little more time with editing to lessen the spelling errors and such. Good luck! :)

A very interesting story so far! I like the description and how it’s heading. I read quite a few different types of fan fictions, but this one was well told and I can’t wait to see where it all goes, the emotions and the character interaction are great - you’re good at writing. Keep it up!

Im not a HIM fan so I didn't know how I was going to like this, but its actually really good. When I saw the different language I was like "omg what am I reading?" But the translation at the end was helpful. Keep up the good work :)

I haven't read a story about Ville Valo is sooooooooooooooooooooo long! This was nice to see! haha. You have a really great style of writing that I can't really compare to anything else. All I know is that you're doing a really great job at it! I might stick around to see where this story goes. :)

Make that three subscribers:) I really love this story. I don't normally read Ville Valo stories because I don't know who he is but with your story I don't need to know who he is for it to make sense. You are doing a great job. I love how when they are speaking Finnish I can get the gist of the conversation but the translations at the end of the chapter are nice too. Keep up the good work. I can't wait to read more:)

I'm a HIM fan but I don't really know but about the members themselves although, I do recognize Ville's name.

I love the summary although, your layout is really tedious but that's alright 'cause it's easy to read. Real easy. Your sentence structuring his brilliant but you should use more description in this story.

Also, you should capitalize the story title properly.

I don't really normally read Ville Valo fanfics but this seems pretty interesting. The title is a little long to be honest, and you should use the proper capitilization. The sentences seem to be a little choppy to be honest, and I prefer reading more description rather than a lot of dialogue, but that's just my preference, but overall this seems really interesting.

Hey, So i dont usually read Ville Valo fan fictions, but yours was intriguing i like how you didnt do the whole she's in a band and they go on tour together and fall in love kind of thing because it gets a bit boring after a while.

Also i like the fact that you have brought Ballet into it, usually nobody think's of doing that because they dont usually go together but in your story i think it work's, i do have to admit i did get a little mind blagged by the whole finnish thing but i translated it on google and it all made sense.

All in all i enjoyed the first three chapters and i think that you have made an awesome start, obviously sitting down and planning it all instead of just going in and winging it. Congrats and good luck with your story :D

intriguing. i like. subscribed :)

wow...first comment---this never happens :)
anywhos....so far it seems pretty cool. def got some potential