Through the Window - Comments

I liked it a lot. =]

One thing, though. Near the end, in the paragraph that starts 'The two broke the kiss quickly', you had a typo. Instead of "look", you wrote "slook".

Good luck in the contest.

You have the most amazing ability to write. I mean, like, the words you
used to describe what was happening made it that much easier for me to
imagine it in my head, although I've seen the movies and such. But this
was absolutely amazing.
I was so curious to see what you would write because Gravity is one of my
favorite songs from the list and I think you've definitely done it justice with
your story. It was just...I can't even think of a word to use lol!
Simply A. MAZ. ING. =]

That was so beautiful!
OK, I have to admit that for a sixteen year old I am WAY to much of a Peter Pan fan, and kinda protective over the original story.
But I loved this.
It was so vivid and beautifull and emotive and...wow.
It made me feel so happy that Peter and Wendy flew away together, that thier childhood love survived...That was just perfect.
But then I felt so sad because of the children that Wendy was leaving behind, her husband....
Please let me know if you write any more!
<3