To be completely honest with you I wasn't really drawn in. I'm not sure if it was the fact that it's a bandfic, and I just don't enjoy reading those or the fact that it wasn't that appealing of a storyline. But that's just my opinion. I can see that there is a bunch of people who do enjoy this. One thing I noticed is throughout the first chapter you continuously change tenses and it just ruins the flow of it. You go from present to past tense like five times. Also, the layout isn't the prettiest. Maybe get an editor to help you go through this and fix your tenses and what not? Otherwise, nice job. Keep it up.
November 14th, 2010 at 10:28pm