The Diary Of a Fampy - Comments

Amazing story!!!! I just absolutly love it. Yea so there was a couple mistakes but i understood it perfectly...
Very creative!!!!

I like the concept of it. Perhaps if you went over it and fixed some spelling mistakes it would be a lot better. It also seemed like you were rushing things.

This is really good. I like how at the end the Grandma got really annoyed and started calling him a bastard and syaing she ripped him to shreads infront of a little boy. I smiled at that.
I loved the wee boy, he seemed really cute anmd stuff.
This is really good. XD The plot was amazing. Very diffrent to the things out there (:

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by the by... GOOD JOB!

naz... that's an interesting name!
i like that actually!

Chapter 3
Whoa, she killed him a second time. Pretty awesome though! Please update when you can. :D I'll be waiting.

Chapter 2
Is awesome! There's a cliffhanger but I'm okay because there is another update already there! So I will be reading it! Yay! Awesome story!

Is there a slight chance that you have time to write more during winter break, if you have one?

Please continue. And also, I reread what I said in my second comment. It sounded like it could go the wrong the way, what I meant as 'dumb' was my happiness from getting first comment. LOL.
I've been waiting for a while for this to be updated Missy.

Like the person above said, there are a few there were some grammar, punctuation, and spelling mistakes. But if you go over it, I'm sure you'll find them all Try proof-reading before you post The mods will ban you for a month if you have to many errors.

When someone talks it's easier to read it you start a new paragraph. It helps not to confuse your readers by seeing the boy talk and then Naz in one paragraph.

The idea and plot is so creative! I love how it starts out with a boy wanting a bedtime story and it's not just a story. I love it!
Don't stop writing it though. I was offering up positive criticism. I can't wait to see what else comes!

Lol, this is dumb, but yes! I got first comment! Yay!

That was an interesting story! There were some grammar, punctuation, and spelling mistakes that made some parts quite difficult to understand, but other than that, it was superb.

I tried to look at the story plotline with a critical mind, but it's somewhat hard to say anything that will help you improve. The plot was too good.

This story was interesting. Please update soon!