Im a slave to Twins - Comments

and now i just saw you have. lol my bad.

you sould defintally make another book. It is a great story. =]

I liked the story and I really agree with Jedikaren... well I'm looking forward for the sequel

Yay! ~does the happy dance~ Go River! She made a good choice. But I really want the next chapter to come out, I wanna see Rain's reaction and River's reaction. If I was River I would be doing the happy dance and if I was Rain I wouldn't be able to talk, well I guess thats what Rain gets for being so dull, no offense, I just thought that would be a good word for him. I see River as the one with the bad boy side! Go River! :P Write the next chapter soon!

Yay! ~does the happy dance~ Go River! She made a good choice. But I really want the next chapter to come out, I wanna see Rain's reaction and River's reaction. If I was River I would be doing the happy dance and if I was Rain I wouldn't be able to talk, well I guess thats what Rain gets for being so dull, no offense, I just thought that would be a good word for him. I see River as the one with the bad boy side! Go River! :P Write the next chapter soon!

GMO! U HAVE GOT TO KEEP WRITING! U CANT JUS END IT LIKE THAT! PLZ PLZ PLZ UPDATE SOON!

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I really really want River to win.... = 0
He is just so much more amazing!!

Oh, and about your age. I think age doesnt matter. You are who you are, you just havent been on earth as long as other people. And truthfully Im around 12 (-_-) But I have the body and mind of a 16 year old. My parents have to basically show people my birth certificate to prove that I am 12. I learn around a high school level and sometimes I think of myself as a 16 year old trapped in a 12 year olds body (But sadly I have a 16 year olds body -_- Im just young, a 17 year old called me his girlfriend before o.O). I once read something true! Where a girl didnt have good parents, she was taking care of herself by the time she was 3. And!! There was an 11 year old who graduated from collage. I really dont think age matters most of the time. So I just live life like I want and I Dont Want people to lable me for my age!

Love your story! n.n And I think she should choose River. Rain is just so..... ordinary..... he is kinda boring sometimes because he is all softie. Im not saying I like evil people. Im just saying its nice to have someone who is.... not ordinary... xD Like River. Sometimes I dont understand him, anyways, keep up the good writing!!!! :P [x] River [ ] Rain

i think rain if he's the right 1 idk i think its he i choose the time when she cleaned the rooms the 2nd room i chosse im i think thats rain

GMO! U HAVE TO UPDATE RIGHT NOW! PLZ PLZ PLZ! IF U LOVE ME U WILL UPDATE NOW!

She loves RIVER right??
Please let it be RIVER!!
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Hmm let me put it to you in nicer terms than other people have:

Spelling is easy to fix as Word or any other word processor usually will catch these mistakes. It doesn't take long to copy and paste your work into Word and spent a good 5 minutes editing it.

Second, unless you are extremely gifted writer, I don't buy your age. But that's cool with me if you really are 15 and just want to say you're 10. Trust me, I'm not being offensive here. Yet, others may be disturbed by the idea of a 10 year old writing this sort of material as 10 years don't even have their period or know what being horny is or what sex is. The level that you write about tells me that you aren't a 10 year old, but a horny teen (as all teens are) who has done what other horny teens do (which is read sex stories, talk to friends, and daydream about what you wish some guy would do you to).

Third, complaining about your hurt feelings doesn't make us stop. It actually hurts your story and puts people off. You would do better to acknowledge our comments, both good and bad, and keep writing your story.

It is a good story and I enjoyed it. I do hope you will continue and ignore the morons here who are incredibly rude and lazy with their chatspeak comments.

NOOOOOO all those people can go fuck themselves and u shouldn't pay b/c ur ONLY 10 so any1 got a problem with my comment then say it 2 me and u'll wish u haven't o and little 10 year old if they ever do that again tell me I'LL DEAL WITH IT!!!!!!!!!! and any1 else got a problem go find monkey balls and suckum!!!!!!

I know.But you know they have spell check right? I know you said not to comment on it but it would really help capture peoples attention if you capitalized in the correct places. I know Im not the best at it either but it really would help. :)

ur story is the shit! i cant believe some idiot keeps reporting u. i hope they go to hell. ugh. dipshits. lol.

RIVER

its pertty good i really like it and can i read more plzzzzzzzzzzzzz????!?????!?????!????!????!?????!!!!

Your 10?! This is kinda disturbing to read from the mind of a 10 year old, I didnt 10 year olds even thought about rape and sex and stuff like this. Aren't you supposed to be writing about unicorns and edward cullen or something?(ok maby not twilight aint all that good) But still stuff like this shouldn't even cross your mind.
But I still cant lie, the story is ok. considering your still a child
good luck with the story!