But I couldn't force myself to read more than 6 chapters.
First of all, you should make a new paragraph. It's hurting my eyes the way you write right now.
You go way to fast with the storyline, at least too fast for me. It was strange, he comes to her by wonder and asks her out. I just think it's odd.
Running from the cops in the woods? I mean, running from the cops when... as I understood... they were next to you?
Oh, and... use " when they speak please, I saw you put ' too. You don't really describe anything that happens - you know, what they talk , it's so fast for me. I can't imagine the places they are in.
I just don't know how to say it.
And please don't all shout at me. I'm expressing my oppinion.
And by the way.
It's my first rude comment *blushes*. I'm usually a nice person.