Träumer - Comments

OMG!!! This story is frikkin awesome!!!!!!!! I cried in ch.4 lol pls write more! ^.^

Hello : )
I just stumbled over this and I have a little hint for you:
"Warum waren Sie sah mich an?"
Is almost completely wrong. (We call it babelfish translations around here, you get the words translated but not the meaning.) The sentence is without structure and the time is wrong.
"Warum haben sie mich angesehen?" Or "Wieso hast du mich angeschaut" (in english: 'why did you me look') would be right (the second one is more in the fashion of young people (adressing another young person).
I'm sorry if other people already pointed this out but it's a pet peeve of mine reading wrong german in storys, I always have to point it out XD

loving this. so original. please continue updating!

I really like thing. It's an interesting plot and very original.
Your writing is really simple, and yet very descriptive to the point where it doesn't go overboard
I'm looking forward the next chapter.
Definitely subscribing.

Not at all confusing, save for the simile to it being like the sun not rising. Perhaps a little too far.

I really love the idea of "rebirth," completely fascinating.

You are amazing, and I'm so jealous of your writing ability.

I just now found the time to read it, and I still think that it's good. You are a damn good writer, I wish I had a half of your talent when it comes to writing. Go on, please?

I actually read chapter one a week or two ago. I thought it was a oneshot.
Surprised when I saw an update, even if it was late.
It's an interesting plot and I really like this thus far.

I love this. (:
I can't get enough of it, already!

I was wondering how you were going to make him not-dead. And I knew the doctor would be doing something freaky. I hate that you're an amazing writer, except not really. I really love you.

I love how simple the summary is, it’s really beautiful yet it’s slightly tragic and upsetting; it’s got such a morbid feelings hanging over him... I warn you, I know jack about Tokio Hotel apart from they have a wicked-cool song called Monsoon that is on my iPod and MP3 player :)

The layout though, the layout is really ugly... I hate to say it but honestly, it is... Maybe you could make it a little less cold and depressing and make the border less bold...

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It was cold for late-April, the wind ruffling her dress and making her shiver.

The opening is quite plain and simple but nevertheless, it’s a nice little opening although I would have liked it to be maybe more eye catching.

They followed wherever Bill went. She shook her head and continued down the 3AM streets.

I don’t enjoy the way you structure your sentences; they’re too easy and too short – I enjoy large and complex sentences best if I’m one-hundred percent honest with you, they make a far more interesting read but that’s only one person’s opinion...

Emma felt lucky for having chosen to study abroad that semester. It seemed the center of the world had been Berlin that spring. It was more amazing than she could have ever imagined when she said goodbye to her friends and boarded that plane.

I feel that this paragraph wasn’t written as well as I believe you could have written it – it didn’t sound right to read and when I read it aloud, it didn’t just roll off of my tongue like it should have done.

Everyone has their little thing with Tom, but then they move on to bigger and better things. Emma's bigger and better thing was Bill.

Not being a fan on these guys, I don’t know who each one is but it I’m right, by the sounds of it, they’re the twins? Yes? Maybe I’m right? Anyway, I wish you’d put a description of them in because I have no idea how they look...

Bill loved flashy stuff. He was just like a little kid when it came to sparkles and sequins.

This made me smile, it really did – it’s quite and if I’m honest, quite sweet :)

When your highest diety is dead, especially killed, all you can do is lash out at someone around you. Killing another fan in anguish is not an aquitable crime, believe me.

What happened? I’m really curious now! It sounds so amazingly well built up!

What a horrible death under such a beautiful sky.

What a beautiful line in such a tragic part of this first chapter.

"Bill Kaulitz dead in a 'Don't Jump'-esque suicide." Now wouldn't that be a great headline?

Just. Wow.

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Overall, I’m not sure what to make of this one shot. It was such a beautiful tragic story but I felt it was a little too simple, a little too short. Maybe you could have made it longer and maybe a little better...

Great job though, the idea of it upsets me even though I’m not a fan of this band and well, it upsets me to even think of.

Finally! Finally I can read something what interests me... Thank you! I loved it, really!

I was just wondering the edit thing D:

lol why aren't smilies working and why can't I edit that post?

I'm so pumped. Subscribing right away. One piece of concrit- you need a quotation mark before the last line: Bill Kaulitz dead in a 'Don't Jump'-esque suicide.". You only have one.

This is the comments page for Traumer, a rather original Bill Kaulitz story about death, rebirth, and struggles that come from copious amounts of fame.
This story has flashbacks, regret, and a bit of romance to keep you entertained.
If you are looking for a straightforward story, I suggest you look elsewhere.
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