It's very hard to drag myself away to comment but you deserve it. Chapter three is a very good one. I might be biased in that I love action and real hardcore fighting. It was a surprise to have Andros so willing to help so easily but it worked.
First of all you are a great person to talk to so I thought i'd check out your stories.
This one has kinda taken up my time so i haven't got round to the others yet (plus i kinda had to leave for a couple of hours so that put a big halt in the reading)
So far, chapter 2. It's an interesting plot. With a lot of potential and i do enjoy it. It does feel very much like Buffy but it doesn't have the limitations that Buffy did.
I did notice quite a few grammatical errors and the equilibrium you've put in there really has put a spanner in the works. I like the use of enigmas, what was this debt? Who exactly is Andros? What will our heroine do? Also, where does the werewolf come in? Cannot wait for the two rivals to meet with her in the middle. It's what makes these stories jsut so much more fun.
I agree with Auden Cliche, it's good to see a vampire story going back to the classic conventioons we all know and love. While it's good to move forward a bit of simple vampires in the night drinking human blood is like going having a glass of warm milk if you can't sleep at night. It's familiar and comforting and a joy to read, always.