The Playlist - Comments

Okay, so I claimed this a long time ago and I see that you've changed a few things, especially the layout. It looks much better now and it makes the story easier to read (: Although, I still have a bit of con-crit. I promise that it's not bad though. The color and size of the font didn't really fit with the story; I think it would be better if the color would be black. But that's just a suggestion. Also, there were a few places where the paragraphs were oddly spaced, but obviously, that can be easily fixed. I also suggest adding a few more details here and there; someone once told me that useless details are the best way to go. Like, what's the atmosphere in the diner? What's Hannah feeling while she's on break? Stuff like that help the story go along more smoothly.
Once again, good luck with this!

Honestly, I agree with hurricane eyes. The layout. Hmm. I don't know if I liked it. It was a bit too bright - at least the picture is - and the black background doesn't go with the picture. There are grammar mistakes, missing commas and periods. I highly suggest getting a beta before this story is reported.
The start of this story, however, was very different. I never read stories like these, since I'm not much for stories that come off as a bit cliche. It's a good idea, really it is, but again, like hurricane eyes. said, it wasn't executed very well.
Good luck in editing this!

I reviewed Chapter 1.

First of all, and please don't take this the wrong way, I was very discouraged by the layout. It's very amateur, very bright, and I also disliked the character descriptions in the Summary. They would be much better off on the designated Characters page. I was also quite wary of the story, as the summary of the plot so far seemed cliche.

I did like the start; it was different, and had potential. However, within the second line I could already spot a grammar mistake, and that put me off. I'd advise you to use a beta, or spell check; a quick scan through revealed many mistakes.

It's definitely different, and I really like the idea of it; however the execution was not as good. I would really advise you to look it through and correct the mistakes. The story does have a lot of potential, though.

I like this so far... It's a fun story, very original. I love the variety in characters, and there's a little of everything. Keep writing!

i lurv da way you get your characters across with out having to go into a load of messy detail ! its a well written, easy going story. Love it! xox

This is a great story, very bright, eye catching and joyful. From what I could see in the first three-four chapters. However I am concerned; the fact that there are no paragraphs overwhelmed me and discouraged me to read on. Keep it up though.

This is great!!!! How soon are you gonna update?

Its really good Abbi love it