Story Book - Comments

I love your first chapter.

OOOhhhh... I love the new chapter! Who's this dream boy, in every sense of the word? *wink wink*

Wait, now I'm confused...
Noah and Ashley were going out?
How much time passed exactly?
Did I miss a flashback?
Overall, I'm just very confused.

I still love it, though. Keep updating!

Ooooh! The suspense is killing me!
What happened to her mother? Why did Clarissa keep pushing angels away?
Your revision was MUCH better this time. Applause! *claps and cheers and rah-rah-rahs*
Keep writing!

Nice story. Nice layout.

Good, good.
I like how you throw new interesting elements into the story to keep your readers engaged. It certainly works on me! :)
Just a little note: You might want to edit your chapters before posting them because the syntax and run-on sentences distract me a little.
Threw= "I threw the ball to the pitcher." Through= "I had to go through the tunnel."
Just a thought. :)
Keep writing! I can't wait for your next update!

P.S. If you want me to shut up with my comments, all you have to do is ask.

The second chapter leaves me even more intrigued than the first. What is this "missing piece"?
I was a little confused because you kept jumping around a lot in the chapter, and I'm not really sure what part to keep in mind and what parts were just story, you know? And what was this dream that she had?
I can't wait for your next update! :)

I am reading your story and it is wow. You use such figurite language and everything flows. It is very creative and the exact kind of story that I like to read.

Oh, exquisite! I loved this; I'm a little confused because you jumped around quite a lot, but that's okay. I do it too. :)

Update soon!<33

Oo this is good... plz update!

SjkNAQKNnKKDndnaikj! <-- That was my reaction when I saw how little comments this had. Not only is this a brilliant story plot, but it's beautifully written. This chapter was like a magnificent piece of artwork, constructed only of gold, placed high on a podium to be worshipped by me. :)

... Sorry, the last part was just a bit too creepy. xD Anyway, you should feel very proud of yourself. This is marvelous. Please continue this because I've already subscribed. :3

I like where this is going. ^-^
*subscribes!*

Keep it up.

wow, i love it!!!
your so good at describing things!
can't wait to read more!!

Oh... my... God...
That was an amazing beginning!
There was a blip or two, but still, that is one of the most amazing first chapters I have ever read on this site!
Update soon! And by soon, I mean now. *whiplash* Just kidding!... not really. Work.