War of the Angels - Comments

It wasn't a horrible ending:] But I have to say that you could REALLY amp the story up in a re-write if you wanted:D Just a suggestion... But good job as it is! Its a good story, but like I said, if you want to make it amazing then I suggest a re-write?

okay yea i know this syory is finished but i really liked it!
If you could edit it and add slightly more detail you could get it published!
The he's half and half was a great twist, hope to be reding more of you stories

YES! UPDATE! FINALLY:D YAAAAAAY! I just realized something... Corey.. Slipknot... frontman... right. NOW it connects^^

very interesting... Half demon, half angel? Whos the demon, his mom or dad?

Crystal is a fucking awesomely funny angel:D NEW IMAGINARY BFF! jkjk

hey! You haven't updated in ages. Could you update soon please? <-- there. I said it. The magic word.

this story is so good :D
I love how fast it starts off, and the story is developing really well, the italian is cool too (:
chapter 6 and 7 were intense! =O lol
I can't wait to read more (:

oh and Wait And Bleed is so good (:

-gasp- an update!! 8D
you have some good descriptions =)

lolXD crystal had SUCH a bad fan girl momentXDXD omfg^^ they're so cuteee! pretty good for a first story, but I think you rushed things a bit too much

....update more???
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ill subscribe if you update....=D

yay for 15yo tantrums!! xD
this is a good story. i do like it. a little random and very fast paced but still awesome. i think it was a little mean of angeline to say 'thats a good idea, we can kill him' before she realises corey has powers...
sanctuary of tears!! me want.

Perfect format. :D
I really, really liked this chapter. The characters are really starting to develop now. :]
Yay!
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I wish I could update as fast as you. Lol. It takes me, like, two weeks. A lot of times even longer.

The paragraph format was nearly spot-on this time. :] Now, we have an issue of run-on sentences. Lol. Buuut. That's not a big deal. :]

Anyway, I totally liked this chapter. I was into it the whole time. I have, like, a zillion questions in my head already and its only the second chapter. :D

I very much like this story. You're amazing at description when it comes to anything you write.
The only thing you need to do is separate it out into paragraphs. This isn't another one of my dumb pet peeves, lol. Not separating them out could get you banned from the stories section because its a part of the rules.
If you need help doing that, I'd be glad to edit it for you so you can see what I mean.
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Otherwise, I think it is a great story. I loved the immediate action and the mystery already forming. I am extremely curious to find out more. Once more, great detail.

I applaud you. :]