December 15th, 2009 at 04:08am
The first thing I'll comment on is the title; it's so creative yet fits perfectly. I must say that your use of copmparison in the summary is so good it's almost intimidating.I really should take a hint and use it in my writting, eh?
After reading the first chapter, I really can't wait to read how you describe her opposite; the underachiever. Maybe he won't even go to school. Who knows? All I know if that you've taken a cliche and overused idea and made it your own. You made it seem so completely original; using just your writting style and the blunt oppositeness. (Of course I haven't seen the guys description yet, but her's is just so... angelic!)
I really liked what you said about her beaing named prettiest in five yearbooks. That was an incredibly good way of saying she's pretty; I must aplaude you.
Long comment much? To wrap it all up I am gonna say that I can't wait to read more - please update soon!
First of all, his name is aweosme. And how you compared it to ecstacy. You kept surprising me with his description. I love the part about him being a ladie's man.
Great job, Sheep. I can't wait to see the third chapter ^^