Sweet baby Jesus. I just wrote a long ass comment and it didn't post. That does not make me happy. At all. Grrr.
Anyway. I think its the latter option. My wrath is a fearsome thing XP
I know how hard it must have been to write a character like her. She was very different than the norm from you. But I appreciate that you tried something new for me. I could see more of the usual fiery attitude towards the end of the story. It was like meeting an old friend again lol. I love that he was confused by her even after having known her for so long. It would have been pretty amusing for him to have beaten the crap out of Zack though lol.
And I'm intrigued by the idea of having sex in a fun house. Would it be completely lame to say it seems like fun?
It didn't suck at all. I thought it was very good. But I do think you thrive on the pressure of waiting until the last minute lol.