Charlie Who? - Comments

I really like this story. It's very interesting, though I'm not really understanding the relationship. I can get that Charlotte obviously hates Charlie from the way she's reacting, but I haven't seen any real reason to despise him. Is it just a feeling she has? You should probably expand on this a bit in the story so it's more clear. Otherwise, the story is great. I like the mystery of not really knowing what Charlie is up to. It's very nicely written, also.

This seems to have some real promise; I like it.

Just a suggestion, though? The layout was hard to read, and there should really be some space between your paragraphs.

Other than that, this is really good:)