Hello, Sunshine. - Comments

Awesome short story :) I really liked the link between the rain and the sunshine. I saw it as the sun coming out with the peace formed, in like...a supernatural way? I dunno :P
It'd be good a little longer, with more detail in each little scene. But then I guess it'd become a story with each scene a chapter, which defeats the purpose of short stories :P

Thanks! :D

I checked back to bookmark your story and I noticed the changes you've already made.

Great job with the dialouge, reading a second time was just as good.

The overall plot for this story is original, I really loved it.

I found the dialogue to be really hard to read. It was all bunched up in the same paragraph and I thought the new teacher was the boss. Anyways...

I like how you added that part about the sun. I'd forot the rainy weather until then but it did tie it all together.

Overall, it's a great story ^^