Fatality: The Final Race - Comments

One last tipo i noticed. In chapter 17 you said 'It was a menichael sort of smile' just so you know it is spelled: maniacal

Phanes.

Hey fly, i just finished it and it was great. Keep it up. I hope i didnt bug you that i was pointing out tipos. Its a habbit.

Phanes.

Hey, another text oddity: You say, 'I wouldnt know what do to do if i hurt you.' do to do dosent make sence to me. Is it a tipo? if it is intentional let me know.

Phanes

Hey, another tipo in chapter 10, you say 'boos' instead of 'boss' in the first parograph

So far it is pretty good, I would make who is talking a little more clear though.

Also, some of the fights dont seem to be very real, maybe a revision here or there?

Keep it up,

Phanes

Hey, i saw another tipo in chapter 4, you said 'teh', not 'the' idk if that was intentional or not but i thought you should know.

if it bugs you that i am pointing out tipos let me know and i will stop.

Phanes.

Hey fly, i liked it but I noticed a tipo at the end of chapter two, you said 'ot' instead of 'to'

Just thought you should know,

Phanes

this is my fave...next to fuck up....ive read this one like 5 times its so awesome babydoll!!!!....i love it i love it i love it ilove it------>ect.

OMG NASHY! finish it..I want more!

Jeezus babe...That's fucking intense.