Winter - Comments

This was really cute. You did an excellent job of writing this. However, I found a few things where a comma is needed, I believe.

“Awe, well someone’s being a romantic,” she cooed, smiling genuinely. “Thank you, though, for being so sweet.”

“What are you trying to do, kill me, woman?” he asked jokingly, turning around to face her.

Overall, this was so sweet.

Very, very, very cute. I wish there was more to read! You're certainly talented at writing, so please don't stop. (:

For obvious reasons, I fangirled so so much over this. I couldn't find a thing wrong with it.

Secondly, it was very well written. I loved how descriptive it was, and I felt like I was there. I certainly wished to be Rachel. haha.

This was so realistic, and I can't get over that point. I mean, it wasn't overdone or fairytale-like; it felt like it could really happen!

"Matthew shook his head and thought, I’ll make a note of that for later." I seriously grinned very widely as I read that. Even if that wasn't your intentions.

I could not find anything wrong with this; it was magical.